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| When you have short sentences or when your sentences
are closely related, you often can combine sentences to increase readability. Especially watch for sentences that
Examples: 1. Each pellet size has a different weight and diameter. The weight and diameter directly affect the over-all ballistics of each round. Each pellet size has a different weight and diameter, which directly affect the over-all ballistics of each round. 2. Plastics are non-corrosive and resistant to chemicals. These chemicals do not rust or degrade in water or other chemicals. 3. Road development has several impacts on caribou herds. Road development creates fragmentation of habitat. Road development, which creates fragmentation of habitat, has several impacts on caribou herds. . Because road development fragments habitat, it has several impacts on caribou herds. ::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::: |
Production of Lactic Acid from Potato Waste
Traditionally, there are two methods for commercially producing lactic acid. Production methods include either chemical synthesis or carbohydrate fermentation from a substrate. Chemical synthesis involves chemical reactions that require plastic based products such as lactonitrate and acetaldehyde for production of lactic acid (Huang, 2005, p. 265). Chemical synthesis of lactic acid is a man-made process that can’t occur naturally. In contrast, carbohydrate fermentation is a natural process for producing lactic acid. Although it is a natural process, it can be controlled and enhanced for commercial purposes. Carbohydrate fermentation involves biological reactions that convert simple sugars into lactic acid using living orgasms. This process requires a substrate containing some form of carbohydrate.
Potato waste is an excellent source for these carbohydrates. Its main component is starch, which…..
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Number of words = 126 |
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Number of BE verbs = 6 = 60% |
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Flesch Reading Ease = 11.4 |
REVISED
Traditionally, there
are two methods for commercially producing
lactic acid:
chemical synthesis or
carbohydrate fermentation from a substrate. Chemical synthesis
,
a man-made process that can’t occur naturally
,
involves chemical reactions that require plastic based products such as
lactonitrate and acetaldehyde for production of lactic acid (Huang, 2005, p.
265). Chemical synthesis of lactic acid is.[ ↑↑
] In contrast, carbohydrate fermentation
is
offers a natural process for producing lactic acid.
Although it is a natural process, it
that
can be controlled and enhanced for commercial purposes. Carbohydrate
fermentation involves biological reactions that convert simple sugars into
lactic acid using living organsms.
This in
a process that requires a substrate containing some form of carbohydrate.
Potato waste
is
provides an excellent
source for these carbohydrates.
because
Its main component is starch, which….
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Number of words = 113 (reduction = 13 wds =
10% reduction) |
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Number of BE verbs = 3 = 50% |
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Flesch Reading Ease = 5.7 |
Revised again to increase readability according the the Flesch Reading Ease Scale:
We have two ways to make lactic acid: chemical or fermentation. The chemical process needs products made from plastic. On the other hand, fermentation is a natural process. It can be controlled to make large amounts. It converts sugars to lactic acid by using live life forms. Potato waste makes a good source of the sugars because it is made from starch.
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Number of words = 62 |
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Number of BE verbs = 3 = 50% |
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Flesch Reading Ease = 70.8 |