Here’s the sentence style exercise I hope you can do for class on Thursday, October 18:

Phil Druker/ Tech Writing                                   NAME____________________________

Style Check and Revision Exercise for the Proposal

***Turn this in on Thursday, March 5*** This assignment is worth 2 points.

To do this assignment, copy and paste this page into Word and then:

1.Pick a paragraph from the proposal background section (not paragraph 1).  Cut and paste it onto this page.

2.Count the number of words in each sentence:

S1

S2

S3

S4

S5

S6

S7

S8

S9

S10_______________

Total words:                             Average Length= total words/# of sentences =  _________

3.Circle the BE verbs in the paragraph. BE verbs = am, is, are, was, were, been, being, be

4.Count the number of BE verbs.  Number of BE Verbs/# of sentences x100% = %age of BE verbs per sentence.
(This percentage should be less that 33% and certainly less than 50%.)  Show the calculation here:

5. Put a square around the passive verbs. Passive = BE verb + verb+ past form (See p. 66 in the Course Pamphlet or Passive Sentences on the course web).
        Examples: was broken, is seen, was asked, will be delivered, has been dropped

6. Count the number of passive sentences. # of passive sentences/# of sentences X 100% =  percentage of PASSIVE verbs per sentence. 
(This number should be less that 33%.) Show the calculation here:

7. Revise  at least two sentences to reduce (or eliminate) Be, passive, or wordiness.